Knock, knock. She coughed, fresh blood
peppering her handkerchief. Bone weary, rankled with pain, her
breaths shallow and spare. Knock, knock.
Persistent knocking, rattling her brains. Enough!
Flinging open the door, embracing death, welcoming everlasting
life. The valiant warrior succumbs. Sweet
relief.
Tweet
Nicely done. Very poetic. Welcoming death, but hesitantly. Perfect.
ReplyDeleteJo, I am so pleased you liked it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments. They mean a lot! ♥
DeleteRelief from the pain, but not sure seeing the reaper would be relieving
ReplyDeletePat, I did a bit of research into this concept because I thought the same thing. I have always believed that Jesus was the collector of souls, that you would go with Him to heaven when you die if you believed. So I looked up the connection. Evidently the "grim reaper" came from the book of Revelations and is actually Jesus collecting souls. Because of that connection, I felt confident in proceeding on with the writing of this story and using the image above to illustrate it. There is a lot of symbolism and freaky stuff in the book of Revelations so seems legit. Thanks so much for stopping by and for your much appreciated comments! ♥
DeleteWow.....my friend's mom just passed yesterday...this is timely.
ReplyDeleteJoJo, I am so pleased you liked it and could relate. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI keep telling people that Death is a nice guy. Still, they run from him. I just don't get it.
ReplyDeleteCrystal, while during my research for this piece I was amazed at the parallels associated with the grim reaper and Jesus. Very cool stuff! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments!♥
DeleteThe sweet surcease of pain, even the valiant have their limits!!!
ReplyDeleteJoe, everyone has their limit. Thanks so much for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments. ♥
DeleteTapping pain, angst and expectations so beautifully:)
ReplyDeletevishal, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI know that thought all too well.. Fortunately, I did not succumb, or unfortunately, depending on who you ask. ;)
ReplyDeleteAngel, I am so glad you didn't. I honestly think the world is a much better place with you in it! :) Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments!♥
DeleteBeautiful portrayal of pain here. And that closing line! Great take on the prompt, Kathy.
ReplyDeletethepigmentsoflife, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteFantastic imagery, Kathy! Your word choice is excellent for conveying the message. Blessings!
ReplyDeleteMartha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh, very interesting. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteLaurel, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI had no idea the Death was so polite! Very nicely done!
ReplyDeleteTMW, I did a bit of research and found that the grim reaper and Jesus were considered one and the same. Evidently they get the imagery from Revelations?? Both are collectors of souls. I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story. By all rights, since I didn't make the voting grid this week, and since I was literally dying from this cold, coughing up my vagina and internal organs, I should have skipped writing altogether! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteDeath is nice here. Letting her decide when it was time to go
ReplyDeleteJasbir, so very true. Most times I don't think death allows anyone a choice. It calls, you go. Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeletePoignant. Every valiant warrior finally has to succumb and embrace whatever comes.
ReplyDeleteSunila, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments. ♥
DeleteShe fought well ... perhaps she deserves rest now.
ReplyDeleteAmrit, I agree! Thanks for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeletePain and a closure. Poetic and well done.
ReplyDeleteParul, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOops..!! This ended her suffering.. Well penned!
ReplyDeleteGeets, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deletewow! That was brilliant Kathy!!
ReplyDeleteYou painted the scene so vividly with your words!
Pixie, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks for all your clever input and for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteSometimes, as in this case, greeting death is a blessing and a relief. Nice portrayal of that!
ReplyDeletejannatwrites, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Delete