Friday, August 2, 2013

Found

This piece was written for the 55 Fiction writing prompt at Write Tribe.  Today a mystery.


     Today she chose a different path which led her deeper into the woods than she had ever traveled before.  She quickened her pace suddenly nervous, unsure of her destination.  Suddenly Anna tripped and went sprawling over a partially concealed arm.  She screamed when she saw the decomposed body.  Her friend Heather had finally been found!



42 comments:

  1. Wow! That was excellent, Kathy. I love this sort of twist! Glad to see you're enjoying writing 55-fiction! :-) Thank you for the treat!

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    1. Vidya Sury, I am thrilled that you liked my story. I really like practicing 55 fiction and love spreading my wings giving it a whirl! I may have to try some more and practice more. Thank you for stopping in and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  2. Wow!! That's a fab twist. Loved it!! Great going with 55ers! :)

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    1. Shilpa, your kind comments are a real confidence builder! It makes me want to try even more stories. Thank you so much for your sweet comments and for stopping by. I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! ♥

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  3. WOW! What a twist to a peaceful walk in in the woods.beautiful story.

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    1. Kalpana Solsi, I am so pleased you liked it. That you for stopping in and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. themuseumpiece, that was the mood I was going for. Thank you for stopping in and for your sweet comments!! ♥

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  5. EEEEEEEEK! So much for a peaceful walk in the woods ending with that grisly discovery. Nicely done in such a short word count.

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    1. Writercat59, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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    1. Tayla, It would be quite the horrific discovery. When I wrote this I was focused on the idea of a mystery solved and completely overlooked what a horrific twist the story too. Thank you for stopping in and for your comments! ♥

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    1. Corinne, it did end up with quite the grisly end. Thank you for stopping by and for your comments.

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  8. Wow! LOL! It's interesting how just 55 words can say much more! Nicely done Kathy :)

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    1. Judi, 55 fiction is fun and challenging to write. I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  9. Yikes! What a horrible discovery! Nice job. :)

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    1. Dana, so pleased you liked my little story. Thank you for stopping by and for your encouraging comments! ♥

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  10. I am going to reconsider walking in the woods again..phew..I wouldve collapsed dead too, Kathy!!!

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    1. Me, there are those things to think about in a strange woods. Where I live, that is invariably where a body will be found. Either that or floating in the river. It happens. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  11. Ewwww, that would be an experience to haunt you forever!

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    1. Trisha, I think it would! I don't know how police and forensics people handle the blood, guts, and gore they come in contact with. I would be physically sick and unable to sleep nights. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments!

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  12. Oooo. Creepy. You must be multi-talented since I see that you write horror, too.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com

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    1. Joyce, not sure how multi-talented I am. I tried to write mystery and ended up horror but I really appreciate your kind words. This was my first attempt ever and it makes me feel really good to know you liked it and it creeps you out. Mission accomplished! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments.

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  13. Her footsteps were being drawn towards the scene where a mystery was waiting to be disclosed...mysterious attraction maybe...very effective and captivating

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    1. Shellymona, I am so pleased you enjoyed this. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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    1. JoJo, so pleased I got the effect I was after! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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    1. Bhavya, that was what I was trying...a twist. Thank you for stopping in and for your kind comments! ♥

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  16. OOPS this is straight out of a thriller novel/ Movie
    Good one Kathy :)

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    1. Afshan, I am so happy you enjoyed it. I try to write mystery and end up with a horrific thriller. Oh well, practice makes perfect!! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  17. Hi Kathy. A great 55er. An al-arm-ing twist at the end, if I can put it that way.

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    1. gpadmanabha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  18. Enjoyed that, it must be very hard writing in so few words and you nailed it, really enjoy these 55er flash fiction. thx :)
    Sorry it will only let me sign in with my google id as I'm a self hosting wordpress site. maggie at expatbrazil

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    1. Maggie, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  19. Amazing storytelling, the suspense and mystery were a nice touch.

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    1. Sulekkha, I am so happy you enjoyed my little story. I am relatively new at fiction and it is a little scary wading out into this new genre but I am enjoying it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  20. This was a little scary. I cannot quite imagine her plight post the find...

    Richa

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    1. Richa, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments. They mean a lot. ♥

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  21. Beautifully written though with a sad end. Perfect 55-er:)

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    1. Vishalbheeroo, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping in and for your kind comments! ♥

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