This piece was written for the 55 Fiction writing prompt at Write Tribe.
He stood chatting
with his friends across the dance floor.
There was no way he knew she was even alive. She looked away for only a moment. Disappointment gripped her. He was gone!
Fingers brushed her shoulder. Surprised, she whirled around to face him. He held his hand out to her shyly and they
danced.
Good one! She was so sad for a second.
ReplyDeleteDebbie, yes...isn't it nice when Prince Charming decides to make an appearance after all? Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed it!
DeleteGee, maybe this couple was on the river work cruise that my couple was on. ;) Glad they found each other in the end.
ReplyDeleteWritercat59, I actually didn't read yours until after I posted this one! Maybe they could catch a full moon on deck. :D Thanks for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteAww, a nice happy ending (so to speak) :) Maybe more like a happy beginning!
ReplyDeleteTrisha, yes it could work both ways!! Could even be those one night things. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteNow that brought back a very happy and delightful memory of a school dance many many moons ago. Loved your story.
ReplyDeleteSuzy, I had memories of school dances too but unfortunately my memories of those dances never turned out this well. The boys didn't know I was alive, and if they did I am pretty sure they thought I was annoying or a nice friend. LOL Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteLovely:)
ReplyDeleteVishalbheeroo, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!! ♥
DeleteGosh, this reminds me of my highschool days at a graduation party. Felt her emotion when I was reading! You can really transport people with your stories!
ReplyDeleteWinnie, Wow!! Thank you for the amazing compliment! I am a relative newbie at writing fiction and I have never wrote a story with so few of words. This was a first, but with all the favorable comments I am stoked to write some more. Thank you for stopping by and for your lovely comments! ♥
DeleteReminded me of my high school dances too, except they never knew I was alive. Never. And the one boy that liked me never went to the school dances!
ReplyDeleteJoJo, I think they might have known I was alive because I made such a pest of myself...but they were not interested in the least. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteI love it when love surpises us this way! Good one, Kathy!
ReplyDeleteCorinne, to me, that is the best love of all. It is life's grand surprises that make it worth living. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
Deletethat was so sweet Kathy... it would have been nice to watch the look on her face from sadness to a happy glow :)
ReplyDeleteSukupedia, if only pictures could be snapped of that precise moment!! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments. I am so happy you liked it. ♥
DeleteAn elegant narration. A very intriguing 55 Fiction indeed :) Take care !
ReplyDeleteTanya, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping in and for your lovely comments! ♥
DeleteBeautiful 55. Drew up a romantic picture of the two of them dancing under moonlight!
ReplyDeleteAditi, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!♥
DeleteWonderful story. I didn't know you could be romantic.
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Joyce, I am so happy you liked it. I have just recently been spreading my writing wings a little more and writing some different things for fun. I had never done a story like this before so it means a lot when people like it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteSo sweet! Love happy endings!
ReplyDeleteI scrolled all the way down to your footer checking out your badges. You're amazingly consistent. I loved the laughing kitty at the end, too! :D
Vidya, yes I am consistent that is for sure. LOL I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for your kind comments!
DeleteWhat a pleasant surprise it must be for her!! Lovely and heartwarming :)
ReplyDeleteShilpa, I am so happy you enjoyed my little story!! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments.
DeleteCute and lovely.. :)
ReplyDeletePS: I absolutely adore the dancing puppy at the top.. :D
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themuseumpiece, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!
DeleteI love Happy Endings Kathy!!!!Good one :D
ReplyDeleteMe, I don't think you are alone on that one! Everyone seems to love a happy ending where I even love a story with a sad ending. Guess I am weird that way but I kind of look at it as making the story a little more authentic...because really not everything ends happily. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!
DeleteYou sketched very nicely the small surprises of romance....too good!
ReplyDeleteShellymona, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!
DeleteFrom grief to immense happiness in one moment. I love love! :D
ReplyDeleteBhavya, I am so pleased you liked it!! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteRomantic stories work best when they have A feel-good ending . Good one :)
ReplyDeletejaish_vats, I agree. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteBrought back sweet memories of my past, loved it.
ReplyDeleteSulekkha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAh! I bet that it would be a memorable dance!
ReplyDeleteSatya, I am sure it would. I would have gave anything to have had one of them in my memories. Thank you for stopping by. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. ♥
DeleteDancing can always uplift almost any kind of mood. nah?
ReplyDeleteRicha
Richa, I agree!! Thank you for stopping by and for your comments! ♥
DeleteWonderful piece...one action can lift your whole mood..thank goodness for crushes :)
ReplyDeleteShanique, crushes are great when they work out like this!! Thank you for stopping by and for your awesome comments! ♥
DeleteNicely written:)
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Ranveer, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!! ♥
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