I
am taking part in “The Write Tribe Festival of Words 1st to 7th September 2013". I hope you enjoy today's fictional story.
Katie
usually enjoyed the brisk walk with her co-worker along the river at lunch
time. Normally it was invigorating and
recharged her to face the rest of the day.
Not today. Today her mind reeled
as much as her stomach rolled. Would
Claudia ever shut up? She had no idea
what she was talking about and at this point was too overwhelmed to care. She smiled feebly and nodded, only half
listening to the constant chatter. She
had her own problems and she was not ready to share with the class and honestly
Claudia was so engrossed in herself she didn’t seem to notice anyways. She
had to figure out what to do first. How
in the hell was she going to explain this one?
God knows, she should be hungry.
She hadn’t eaten a thing since that bagel at breakfast and by the
feeling in her gut that had been a big mistake too.
As they
entered the crowded deli, their most frequent haunt of late, the smell of fresh
fish invaded the air. It was Friday
after all and fish was always the special.
Normally, she loved the deli’s fish and chips platter. The deli did a thriving business and was
popular with the office workers that populated the buildings downtown. Today, a thin sheen of sweat broke out on her
face as she took in the aroma.
“Katie, what do you think?” Claudia asked. Oh shit, Katie thought. What the hell had she been talking about? Confused and embarrassed she racked her brain. They were already nearing the counter and the girl behind it looked at her expectantly her way ready to take her order. The world tilted and the need to vomit now overtook her. She raced for the ladies bathroom at the back of the restaurant slamming the guy waiting in line behind them in the balls with her purse as she fled. She heard his sharp intake of breath, but the need to vomit was too great. She couldn’t stop. He was on his own.
She
flew into the bathroom, dropped to her knees gripping the porcelain bowl and vomited
what seemed like a month’s worth of meals into its depths. Gingerly she flushed the stool, and collapsed
beside it. It was at that precise moment
she accepted the physician’s news to be fact.
Despite the fact it had all come to pass because of one night of pure
insanity fueled by alcohol, like it or not, in approximately 7 months she would
be a mother and her life would be forever changed.
Everyone's worse nightmare come true. Glad it was fiction...
ReplyDeleteTalya, yes it can be quite the jolt to the system if the last thing on your mind was getting pregnant. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
Deletea good read, i like the way you have kept the reader engrossed :)
ReplyDeleteSnuffles Jay, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeletePoor Katie. I felt for the poor girl. Seven was not her lucky number at all.
ReplyDeleteWritercat59, No, it wasn't. Most things in life happen for a reason, even unexpected pregnancies. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteI can empathize with Katie!
ReplyDeleteCrisp and riveting narration, Kathy. Enjoyed reading this one :)
Shilpa, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and making me smile with your kind comments! ♥
Deleteloved ur plot...the night mares are very scary and better if they remain in fiction :)
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Karan, I have to agree on that note! LOL Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteNice twist on "seven" not being Katie's lucky number! Ahh, the poor choices we make at times and the consequences that follow as a result... Great narration! Your piece flowed well and moved the story along.
ReplyDeletePenny
Penny, I didn't even think about it being a lucky number when I wrote this! LOL Poor choices certainly do result in facing the music but in the case of a baby...I would like to think that nothing in life is a complete accident. For whatever reason, that baby was meant to be. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteVery nice Kathy, the angst is palpable.
ReplyDeleteKelly, I am so pleased you enjoyed it and you could sense Katie's angst. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
Deletepoor katie. I loved the fiction though :)
ReplyDeleteRuchira, I am thrilled you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteGreat narration and the seven well woven in
ReplyDeleteSuresh, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! I have been testing my wings more and more in the realms of fiction lately and comments like yours give me even more incentive to continue. Thank you for your kind comments and for stopping by! ♥
DeleteWorst nightmare for any young woman but you wove the number seven in it so naturally!
ReplyDeleteAnne, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Even if you are trying to get pregnant I don't know of anyone that doesn't approach that first taste of pregnancy with a bit of trepidation. I mean...waltzing into the unknown knowing there will be great pain to live through to finally deserve the joy that follows! It can be an even more confusing time if you didn't plan it and were out being wild and crazy...and got caught. Thank you for stopping by and for you kind comments! ♥
DeleteOh poor Katie - wrong choices. And poor man - wrong place wrong time. But perhaps 7 months later Katie might love her bundle of joy. Nice piece of fiction.
ReplyDeleteSuzy, I think you were the only one who caught what happened to the man as Katie flew to the bathroom. LOL In my heart of hearts I think that is why pregnancy takes so long, so that you can grow to love the child that grows inside you and can wrap your mind around the concept of becoming a mother and a major life change. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
Deleteas much as it is a pleasure to hold ur little bundle of joy..when the reason has been all wrong, it can be the most traumatic as well.... beautiful piece!
ReplyDeleteLittle Princess, I agree...but I would like to think after 7 more months of getting used to the idea that Katie would embrace motherhood and celebrate the birth of her child and the gift God has given her. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteInteresting way to blend in 7..loved the story!!
ReplyDeleteNeha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
Deletethat was interesting!
ReplyDeleteAnd one of the worst nightmares of a woman!
Me, definitely!!! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteSo well etched and narrated. Frankly, I didn't anticipated till I reached the end.
ReplyDeletevishalbheeroo, thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! I was going for a bit of suspense when I wrote this and I must have managed it. ♥
DeleteOuch--reality and consequences--
ReplyDeleteAudrey, sometimes life hands them out that way! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteGreat narration Kathy. I was engrossed right till the end. One wrong choice and our lives can change forever.
ReplyDeleteDianamusings, so true. Life can turn on a dime. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
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