Saturday, March 1, 2014

Into the Sunset

I'm taking part in the Write Tribe Festival of Words -3

      Sitting on the sun kissed deserted beach, Theresa gazed out at the vast turquoise blue ocean that spread out before her and met the horizon.  Seagulls swooped down to the rolling waves, peppering the breeze with their melodious caws. The late afternoon sun warmed her face, the sand felt deliciously warm as she dug in her toes, and sifted through her fingertips. Here she felt at peace, in the isolation with only the sounds of the ocean and the seagull’s symphony to lull her. Here she could almost ignore the horrendous pain that overwhelmed her from the damn cancer that was quickly consuming her body and extinguishing her life force. This is where she wanted to be, forever.  
       Four weeks later, with her eyes filled with tearful determination; her daughter spread Theresa’s ashes to the wind as a beautiful orange sun set into the horizon. 

 “Goodbye Mama, I will love you forever and can’t wait until we are together again.” 

    With a heavy heart, Melissa walked slowly back up the beach determined never to forget her mother’s gentle soul and bubbly laugh, at peace with the knowledge that she had fulfilled her mother’s final wishes.


 This was written for the first day of the Write Tribe Festival of Words 3.  We were to write a fictional story using only 9 sentences.




68 comments:

  1. Kathy, this fictional pieces depict how much you miss and love you mother. God bless. This is a beautiful piece, it touched my heart.

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    1. Kajal, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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  2. This is a beautiful post Kathy. Using only 9 sentences, you manged to capture the feelings of mother and daughter so nicely.

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    1. Michelle, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments.

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    1. JoJo, thank you for stopping in and for your sweet comments!

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  4. I just realised from Kajal's comment above that this may be part autobiographical. Hugs to you. Something about the beach, isn't it? It can help wash away painful memories rather effectively. Interestingly, my post today has a beach too.

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    1. Shailaja, there is something that is so peaceful and magically about watching the tide rolling in and out. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  5. Losing a loved one is hard to come to terms with. Couldn't help feel you were remembering your mom. when you are at peace, then she is at peace too. Love and hugs.

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    1. Suzy, I think I can draw from experience when it comes to death, loss, and cancer because of her and my dad. It is easier to illustrate those situations because I have lived it with them. I have always found is easier to write about what I know. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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  6. a v poigant piece kathy...... may her soul rest in peace!

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    1. Mina, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  7. Touching story and a very well written one. I was able to see all the scenes in my mind's eye while I read.
    Glad to meet you through Write Tribe!

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    1. Aarthy, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  8. Love how the mother and daughter sought comfort from the sea. Hugs to you Kathy.

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    1. tulika, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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  9. oh how sad...
    And what a beautiful bond the mother-daughter duo shared!
    Touching and heartfelt Kathy! Hugs!

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    1. pixie, I am so happy you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  10. Oh Kathy, that was a beautiful piece. So lovely description in the beginning, and joy ( my favorite place on earth is also at the beach) , and then the pain... of life. A very heartfelt story that moved me:-)

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    1. Eli, I am so pleased my story has moved you. Most people can identify with lost and dealing with loved ones final wishes. I wanted to create a story that dealt with the loss, dealt with the disease, and the acceptance when there is no longer any hope. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments.

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  11. Beach, my favourite peaceful place too! Beautifully captured the feelings of love and pain.

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    1. nibhz, I love the beach too. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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    1. Michele, it was sad but part of life. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  13. The very first thing I thought when I caught the word ' Cancer' in your narrative, is your post on the World Cancer Day, on having lost you mom to the big C. Well, (Huuggssss)...... the autobiographical element in the story made it even more poignant. You've left us praying all the more for a C-free world, and falling in love with the mother-daughter duo here !

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    1. Sreeja, I am so pleased you liked my story. It is a lot easier to write about what you know. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  14. So beautiful and sad, Kathy. Cancer spells doom most of the time. I love Melissa for carrying out her last wishes. Hugs! beautiful story!

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    1. Vidya, it is a time in life we all face unfortunately. None of us will last forever. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story and could relate. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  15. :( Sad yet beautiful...feeling for both the mother and daughter!

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    1. Aditi, so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet day. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  16. Kathy, such a poignant and touching story, brought tears in my eyes.

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    1. Usha, I am so pleased it touched you. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  17. The only consolation in the sad story is that Theresa in her final stages of her terminal disease found peace and harmony in the nature,the sea,sky and the birds.her daughter aptly disposed of her mortal remains in the wind and the sea. A powerful story.

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    1. KParthasarathi, I think each person comes to terms by the time death comes from to claim them. They have to find their own personal peace with the inevitable and be ready. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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    1. takeawalkinthewoods, it is sad but as necessary to life as the beginning at birth. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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  19. a sad tale.. but I'm happy because of the last line - the daughter deciding never to forget her mom's best features.

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    1. Roshan, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments.

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  20. Heart-touching story., Kathy. Visualized a sunset at the beach...

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    1. Anita,I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for stopping by and your kind comments!

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  21. Powerful. Loss is possibly the worst of human plights--or is it hopelessness? But then again, isn't hopelessness what makes loss so despairing?

    Thank you for taking part in the blitz to Life In Dogs -- it totally made my day :)

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    1. Guilie, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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    1. Martha, I am so happy you liked it! Writing a story in 9 sentences is quite the challenge. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  23. Super sad, and yet beauty in the pain. There's something about wanting to be somewhere, that one place, forever.

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    1. Carrie, it is as if she took some comfort in having something she could control about her ultimate destiny. Thank you so much for your stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  24. Deeply moving, Kathy. I can sense how close this is to your heart! ♥

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    1. Corinne, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  25. Every year I go to Bombay to perform a religious ceremony with my family for my dear dad's departed soul. Carrying out the loved one's wishes makes us happy but sad at not being able to see them. A very touching story, take care

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    1. sulekkha, I think a person really needs to have something, anything to do for them. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. ♥

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  26. Beautiful Kathy...made me think of losing my Dad to lymphoma!!!

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    1. Joseph, I am so sorry about you Dad. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed my story but sorry if it made you sad.

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  27. Beautiful yet sad tale. Somehow the sunset always fills me with solitude and this post just seem perfect to have that setting.
    It's really sweet of the daughter to have fulfilled her mother's wish. Moving story.

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    1. Rajlakshmi, I love the sunsets too. I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  28. The pictures and the words created such a beautiful read... Last wishes stories have a way to connect with me..

    Richa

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    1. Richa, I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  29. Such a touching story, Kathy! Very well done.

    Blessings and Bear hugs!

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    1. Rob-bear, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  30. How sad! While I'm happy she found a moment of peace, I feel for the daughter... letting go is so difficult!

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    1. jannatwrites, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. Shilpa, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  32. I love sunset..and this story is so beautifully penned.. It's sad but I'm glad that her daughter fulfilled her last wish.

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    1. payal, I am glad she did too. It is one of the last things you can do for your loved one is to fulfill their wishes. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  33. It is so hard when life leaves you with only memories of a loved one. Your narration is very poignant Kathy

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    1. Reshma, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments. ♥

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  34. Nature has away of relieving one of pain. Lovely post Kathy.

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    1. geeta, it certainly does. It is part of life. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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