Wednesday, August 26, 2015

Betrayal

A vision in white, my bride glides towards me to the triumphant strain of Mendelssohn's march. 

“I can’t marry you.” 

Horrified.

"I’m pregnant with your brother’s baby.” 

Enraged.

 My fists connect, 

flowers fly,

and the best man is down for the count.





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    1. JoJo, I am pleased you liked it. Thanks for stopping by and for your comments! ♥

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  2. Well, at least she told the truth before the wedding. How traumatic for the groom! Great scene, Kathy. :)

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    1. Debbie, it was the first scene that came to mind when I thought of the question "Why did hell break loose?" The story more or less wrote itself. I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  3. Wow, a punch to the face is well deserved

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    1. Pat, I agree. Of course, he is better off without her. She is obviously a complete slut if she was fooling around with his brother while engaged to him. Thanks so much for stopping by to read my story. I am so pleased you liked it! ♥

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  4. Yep, that would be reason for all Hell to break loose.
    I'd say he dodged a bullet though! ;-)

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    1. Joe, I would say you are right and that he is actually lucky she decided to spill the beans before she married him even if it was on the altar. At least he found out before he was stuck with her. Thanks so much for stopping by to read, comment, and share! I am so pleased you liked my story! ♥

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  5. Oh I love this! I could see the scene play out as I read each word. Great Job!

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    1. tdawneightyone, I am so thrilled you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! You have made my day! ♥

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  6. WOW! I almost expected that he'd hit her. Powerfully done, Kathy :)

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    1. Shailaja, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and for your lovely comments! ♥

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  7. sad! twist in the tale :) a good read for the readers though :)

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    1. Ajay, I am so pleased you liked my story! It was the first scenario that came to mind that would cause all hell to break loose so I went with it. Thanks so much for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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    1. TMW, yeah it kind of does. Just when you think life is perfect, all hell breaks loose and what you thought was perfect explodes in your face. Life can change on a dime. Thanks for stopping by to read and for your comments! ♥

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  9. Couldn't the bride-to-be announce the 'good news' earlier? Horrified he will be. Poor guy.

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    1. Kalpana, my guess is either she is a drama queen or she couldn't muster the guts until the last moment. Thanks so much for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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  10. Oh! What a twist. Well written Kathy. :)

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    1. payal, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  11. ohh that's sad!! that too on the wedding day. Loved your crisp write.

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    1. Rajlakshmi, well it sure made for some unexpected excitement for the wedding guests! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! ♥

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  12. Hell right there at the altar!

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    1. Ellen, yep! And who thought there was no sin in church? Thanks for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  13. Hell breaking loose in a church--with the bride in white and flying flowers. Perfect.

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    1. Jennifer, I am so happy you liked my story. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your lovely encouraging words! ♥

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  14. WOW! Vivid scene. I can actually imagine myself watching it happening right in front o my eyes.

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    1. Jasbir, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  15. Short but sweet. It really makes an impact (no pun intended) and paints a vivid picture.

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    1. Robert, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping in to read and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  16. Ohhh..That must have been traumatic for the groom. Your writing paints a vivid picture of the scene. Nicely done, Kathy. :)

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    1. Shanaya, It will be very lucky if he doesn't turn bitter from the experience. I am so happy you enjoyed my story and I was able to bring it to life for your. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  17. Oops!! Poor groom! Well written Kathy!

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    1. Aditi, I am so glad you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  18. Oooh quite a scandal you got there Kathy. Yeah sympathies with the groom.

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    1. tulika, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. tedstrutz, I am so happy you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  20. Gosh! So embarrassing and distressing! But glad that she spilled the beans before marriage!
    A perfect story for betrayal, Kathy. Good one!

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    1. Shilpa, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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