She watched helplessly as he packed his suitcase. He had found someone else to be devoted to and his betrayal rocked her to her very core. How would she live life without him?
The above fast fiction was written for this week's Trifecta challenge. We were asked write something for the theme "love gone wrong" in exactly 33 words. The kicker was that we weren't allowed to use the following words: love, sad, tears, wept, heart, pain.
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Wonderfully short and says all.
ReplyDeleteyarnspinnerr, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI think she will be stronger than she gives herself credit for...at least that is my hope for her.
ReplyDeletegood piece
Kir, she will definitely be better off without him once she licks her wounds and soothes her broken heart. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThis certainly is a risk in love. I think she'll find out just how strong she really is.
ReplyDeletejannatwrites, I found out first hand how strong I could be. A person has to go through it to realize that yes, you can live without him and yes life can be even better on the other side! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteShe will strengthen along the way and find someone to have a brighter day
ReplyDeletePat, and the next time around she will get someone worth having...a real keeper! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed my post enough to leave a comment. ♥
DeleteSo sad...
ReplyDeleteJoJo, Thank you for stopping by to read and for your comments! It is a sad situation when love goes wrong! ♥
DeleteSounds like she might need some cheering up...
ReplyDeleteBjorn, I think so! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteShe'll probably have the last laugh. The other woman will no doubt be keeping a watchful eye on him... as history often repeats itself. very nicely written.
ReplyDeleteMichelle, History usually does repeat itself when people cheat. If they aren't faithful with one person, they will cheat again. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYeah, that suitcase moment sucks.
ReplyDeletekymm, it sure does. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteWow...that's well done in 33 words without using those words you mentioned! Nice story...
ReplyDeletePsych Babbler, I am so pleased you liked it!!!! I really love the challenge of writing these little snippets. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteWell written... Just in 33 words!!
ReplyDeleteRajlakshmi, I am so happy you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteLet me know when she figures out the answer...
ReplyDeleteaslongasimsinging, I will have to do that!! LOL Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI am always awful at those types of writing challenges.
ReplyDeleteMrs. Tuna, I really kind of enjoy writing challenges. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteLoved this. And thanks to you, I tried my hand at Trifecta for the first time ever!
ReplyDeleteShailaja, YAY! I am so pleased you enjoyed it! I really enjoyed writing the Trifecta prompts and hope you will too! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteDarn...betrayal is a very bitter pill to swallow. Succinctly put Kathy. And the song is lovely :)
ReplyDeleteiwrotethose.com, it surely is!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥ I am so pleased you liked it!
DeleteIn 33 words you conveyed so much!
ReplyDeleteBhavya, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThe most powerful 33 words I have ever read. :)
ReplyDeletejyothisdayout.com, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping in and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteShe will find a way and she will find herself. Years from now she'll thank him for his departure!
ReplyDeleterebecca, Yes indeed she will! I went through this with my first husband and realized after a while I sure was glad he was gone. It was the absolute best thing that could have ever possibly happened to me. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI hope she gets her anger up...and soon.
ReplyDeleteKelly, I think she will once she realizes how much better off she is. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteA good take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the read.
mjshorts, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for stopping in to read and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteI sense she will figure out she's better off without him!
ReplyDeleteGina, I sense that you are right! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteI'm going to quote Call The Midwife "you keep living until your are alive".
ReplyDeleteBrilliant use of words.
caroljforrester, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteThe pain of her emotions is clear, even with sparse words. Well done!
ReplyDeletedebbiesdays, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAah! That's heartbreaking!
ReplyDeleteShilpa, yes it is, but she will go and and she will survive! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteUgh! My heart aches for her. You told a tragic, all-too-real story very well.
ReplyDeleteIvy, I am so pleased you liked it. I lived this story once myself. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteA question we've all asked at one time or another, I think. Hopefully she finds the answer.
ReplyDeletetrudgingthroughfog, I think you are right. We all end up asking this at some point. And the answer is always found because life goes on whether we want it to or not. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh poor thing, nothing hurts more than betrayal...
ReplyDeleteReshma, so very true. That cuts like a knife. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAshwini, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
ReplyDeleteI'm sure she'll find the strength.
ReplyDeleteDraug, definitely! Thank you much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYou captured so much emotion in these 33. Good work!
ReplyDeletemomosapien, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh,how sad!Hope he gets ditched by this other woman soon -will serve him right!Great job:-)
ReplyDeleteAtreyee, That is exactly what needs to happen to him!! I am so pleased you enjoyed my post. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteSo much emotion in so few words!
ReplyDeleteUnknown, I am so happy you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
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ReplyDeleteTrifecta, happy you stopped in to check out my entry. Thank you for the comments! ♥
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