Wednesday, February 26, 2014

The Drawing




      Nicholas could spend hours in his room playing.  His mommy thought it was wonderful when he finally became interested in playing imaginatively with toys like a little boy should.   Whenever she looked for him he was always playing under his bed, which she found odd…but who was she to complain?  He was quiet and happy and had left the video games alone in favor of his LEGOS.  That was a win in her book.


  
       One day while Nicholas was in his room he drew a picture with a big circle in the center coloring it in bold strokes with a black crayon.  Dragons danced around the hole shooting fire from their mouths and the sun shone down from the sky in his picture.  When he was done with it, he quickly lost interest tossing it aside.   

 


      Later he crawled under his bed to retrieve his Spiderman LEGO mini figure and noticed that it was lying on top of the crumpled dinosaur drawing broken in half!  His heart clenched in his chest and tears started to well in his eyes as he grabbed for his favorite.  To his shock when he pulled the mini figure away from the paper he discovered it was intact.  There were no missing parts after all, but how could that be? Perplexed he quickly pulled the crumpled drawing from under the bed.   Weird, he must have imagined it. 





      He retrieved his box filled with mini figures and decided to pretend the circle was a black hole in space sucking everything in proximity into its depths.  He dropped the soldier onto the black circle and freaked out when it disappeared before his very eyes.   He quickly turned the sheet of paper over and shook it, and miraculously the figure dropped out onto the floor.  At this point he was intrigued and ready to conduct some more experiments with his toys when all of a sudden the figure began to twitch.  At least he thought it moved!


    At that very moment Mommy called him to dinner.  He didn’t want to EAT at a time like this, but if he told anyone they would never believe him.  They would think he was lying.  Still he decided to drop a couple other figures into the circle and quickly hid it under the bed until after supper.   He was trying desperately to make sense of it all.  He was eager to finish supper and return to his room to see what other surprises awaited him there. 

      After supper he discovered when he retrieved his figures from the circle they had come to life.  They literally walked around and talked to him and to each other.  They seemed terrified of him at first because of his size, but then they realized that he was their friend and encouraged him to enter into the circle with them.  He was a bit afraid of what would happen if he tried it.  Certainly he couldn’t fit inside the circle.  It was small and he was big.  Instead he dipped his hand inside the circle and was terrified when something sharp grabbed it and wouldn’t let go.     “Mommy!” he screamed hysterically.  Mommy ran into the room horrified by the bizarre site that met her eyes.     Whatever was inside the drawing had ahold of his hand and wouldn’t let go!  

        Nicholas’s LEGO figures seemed to be jumping up and down and trying to tell her what to do to help.   Even though the whole situation was beyond bizarre, she rushed to do their bidding.  Quickly she gathered slices of cheese and placed them on the black circle on the piece of paper.   The cheese disappeared and released Nicholas’s hand.   She held him tightly as he sobbed in terror completely overwhelmed by the entire experience.    As she watched the LEGO mini figures transform back into plastic toys, “she waited for someone to tell her what to do next.



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50 comments:

  1. All those shares and no comments? Odd. Anyway...great story! Very well written.

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    1. Jo, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  2. Wow!! That was brilliant Kathy!!
    You have left a lot to the Reader's imagination and I love such stories.. where I can spend a good 10 minutes thinking up various possibilities!!

    Awesome use of the prompt! :)

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    1. pixie, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  3. Again....I'm gonna ask for a part 2! What's in that hole! Where does it lead and why does it make inanimate objects come to life?

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    1. JoJo, LOL I am so pleased you enjoyed my story!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  4. I love your take on the black hole -- that it brings things to life. An interesting idea!

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    1. Esther, I am so pleased you enjoyed my take! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  5. Ah, those LEGO's ..... :-) Poor Nicholas! I can feel his feelings...:-) Nicely told , Kathy

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  6. That's a wonderful take. I guess, Nicholas must watch the LEGO movie . he'd surely love to see all those figures come to life. :) Maybe that would explain the secret of the black hole

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    1. myriadrainbowhues, it just might! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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  7. WOW! That was amazing story so well told! You must continue it though. Please. :)

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    1. jyothiclicks, I hadn't really thought about continuing it!! It is certainly an option I suppose. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed it!

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  8. That might require some therapy (for both mom and son!) That would be terrifying! I have an idea of what she should do next - destroy the black hole :)

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    1. jannatwrites, it just might!! It think it would freak me out a bit! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your kind comments!

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  9. What an imagination Kathy. loved it.

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    1. Kalpana, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!

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  10. OMG! That was so brilliant Kathy! I was so drawn into the story. Great narrative n what an imagination!

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    1. Aditi, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  11. That was brilliant ... I think you used the prompt so well!! another great one Kathy!

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    1. Nabanita, I am so happy you liked it!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  12. Poor Nicholas, I feel for him,he didn't expect this kind of magic. This can be a nice children's story book. Thanks I enjoyed reading it.

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    1. Ranu 802, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story. I let my imagination run wild on this one. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  13. Wow, what a lovely magical story :) Well done
    Blogspot isn't accepting my wordpress identity, so I thought I'd let you know that my ubmission to the challenge is "Avarice" and my blog is called "Of Magic And More", just in case you looked for me :)

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  14. Hi, I enjoyed this story. I would love to see the action a little more and hear what the figures were say though. Great start to a story that I think could be publishable. :)

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    1. Mary, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. My word count could have went through the roof with this one but with no limit I could have definitely explored dialogue with the lego figures. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments and helpful suggestions! ♥

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  15. This was hilarious! Great imagination and fun to read!

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    1. aishasoasis, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  16. Your stories always have so much imagination from a child's point of view. So cute! This could be a fun children's story. Nice take on the prompt.

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    1. Deanna, Thank you so much for stopping in to read and for your sweet comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! ♥

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  17. Oh and you drew that!?? Really good and great that you are talented in that area too.

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    1. Deanna, while I do draw...this picture was drawn up for me quickly by my 13 year old daughter because my 8 year old son was busy doing homework at the time. I told her to make it just like Nicholas might. You can check out some of my zentangles here on my site if you like! Thank you so much for your sweet comments!♥

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  18. Having 1,000,000,000 legos strewn about my house, this story was particularly fascinating!

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    1. Jen, my house is like yours then. My son has been bitten by the LEGO bug and he inspired this story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  19. A brilliant and different take on the prompt!
    Loved your story :)

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    1. Shraman, I am so pleased you liked it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  20. This is awesome, Kathy! My son would be so thrilled if his LEGO came to life. I love the way you capture a child's perspective so convincingly, right down to hiding his new discovery. Brilliant work! :)

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    1. Suzanne, I am so thrilled that you liked my story. Thank you for the lovely comments and for stopping by! ♥

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  21. Ohh,this one had me gripping the arms of my chair with tension!How frightening for the child and his mom too!Hope he won't stop playing with his toys or stop drawing now-a fascinating take Kathy:-)

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    1. Atreyee, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  22. Woah!! Brilliant imagination Kathy, a black hole that infuses life is a very interesting concept.

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    1. Reshma, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you so much for your sweet comments! ♥

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  23. What a fun story! I'm dying to know what that cheese-loving creature was. This could also work really well as a children's book or do you think it's a bit scary?

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    1. tinsenpup.net, LOL I think it could work. Kids get into scary these days especially with all that exposure to TV and movies. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  24. A very imaginative story, Kathy!! I am intrigued and would love to know more about that mysterious black hole.Part 2 coming up?? :)

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    1. Shilpa, maybe. Thank you so much for the sweet comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! ♥

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  25. You're on a roll girl. Def need a part 2!

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    1. MiMi, I am so happy you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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