Woken abruptly from a vivid nightmare, she discovered her bedroom filled with smoke. Realization struck followed rapidly by terror.
She raced for the door. Heat radiated from it. Terrified she backed away, struggling to breathe. She raced for the window, opened it quickly, and paused for only a moment before jumping into the abyss below.
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Kathy! You did it again! From the fire to the frying pan!
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Love, Vidya
Vidya, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh God. I am terrified of fire. I hope she survived. You portray a vivid picture with your short fiction
ReplyDeletePrasanna, I am a bit too. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh my Kathy - that was a terrifying moment!! The worst of nightmares ... Happy she managed to jump out in time:-) Well written, dear - could feel her stress....:-(
ReplyDeleteEli, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story and could feel the terror of the moment with my words. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat's nightmarish...but great description.
ReplyDeleteKajal, I am pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOMG!! Hope she survived! That was a vivid narration.Well done, Kathy! ♥
ReplyDeleteShilpa, I would say her chances are good since she got out of the house. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeletePainted a great word picture for us to figure out the rest! Well done
ReplyDeleteCarol, I am pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteGreat 55er! Scary... Hope she survived!!
ReplyDeleteAditi, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh !! Scary, Kathy. I wish she's fine !!
ReplyDeleteSreeja, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeletePacked a punch in 55 words! another super 55er Kathy! :)
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Nabanita, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat was a bomb!!! Yeah, the post was a bomb!! It made me skip a heartbeat!!
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Srilakshmi, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and making my day with your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI could feel the terror Kathy... fire can be so destructive. I do hope she is fine.
ReplyDeletetulika, she got out and that is the main thing! Fire can be a thing of beauty but can also be deadly and dangerous. Thank you for stopping by to read my story and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI love the painting, Kathy and how you brought it to life with your words!
ReplyDeleteCorinne, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYikes! A fiery picture you've created, Kathy! I hope she survived!!
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Shailaja, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteFrom one danger to the next... wonder what happened in the Abyss.... Great story!
ReplyDeleteDanny, that is left to your imagination. At least she is not being burned to a crisp! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥ I am thrilled that you enjoyed my story! ♥
DeleteWhat a fire it must have been! The painting is very nice, and so are the words.
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Beloo, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deletewoaa that was super intense... brilliant :D
ReplyDeleteRajlakshmi, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat was pretty scary. I wonder if plunging into the abyss was a better choice or not. Very vividly written Kathy.
ReplyDeleteSuzy, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteScary but awesome write!! Sweet and crisp.. :)
ReplyDeletetaleoftwotomatoes, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOw ow ow...hope she made it!
ReplyDeleteMichelle, Thank you for stopping by to read my story. I am so pleased you liked it! ♥
DeleteGave me the chills! Shudder….
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Madeline, then I feel I have done a good job! YAY! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHopefully it wasn't a big drop
ReplyDeletePat, at least she made it out of the fire. This leaves the reader to decide her fate and to really wonder. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteDude! I want to read on and find out what happens next.
ReplyDeleteTrisha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it so much! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteWas she saved?
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Richa, yes she was saved from the flames. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your comments! ♥
Deleteyour blog is very vibrant i must say :)
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Natasha, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks for dropping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteI would never want to wake up to that. You got my heart racing! :)
ReplyDeleteDavid, me either. It would be so scary! I am so pleased you stopped by and you enjoyed my story. Thank you for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteScary 55er...hope she was saved. Great writing.
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sulekkha, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHope she did not hurt herself badly...
ReplyDeleteReshma, the point is she wasn't killed which in this case is a blessing. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteGripping! Well done, Kathy ☺
ReplyDeleteDebbie, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteFlying by from the A-Z, and I think we have a lot in common ... so I am now following you. Stop by my blog: wordsworldandwings.blogspot.com
ReplyDeleteCathy, I am so pleased you liked what you found here! Thank you for stopping by, for the kind comments, and the follow! ♥
DeleteEek! I have a scene like this in one of my books...only much longer and a little more complicated. You made me want to go jump back into that story.
ReplyDeleteCrystal, I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI admit I had to blow by this story once I saw what it was about. I have a massive fear of fire, ever since there were 3 in my hometown when I was a kid, all within a year of each other. One of them was on the road I lived on and 4 children, ages 11-3, were killed...and they were my friends. The ones that survived never returned to our school. I was in 2nd grade.
ReplyDeleteJoJo, I am so sorry that this story resurrected bad memories for you. Thank you for stopping by and sharing it here. HUGS! ♥
DeleteYou packed a lot of action and intensity into those few words. Well crafted scene. Good writing, my Dear! :)
ReplyDeleteTom, I am so thrilled you liked it!! Thank you so much for stopping by and taking the time to tell me here in your lovely comments! ♥
DeleteI am terribly afraid of fire because of a wild fire almost taking my childhood home when I was eleven, so I got chills while reading this. It's amazingly written though. I could feel the flames!
ReplyDeleteChrys, it makes perfect sense why you would be terrified of fire. I am pleased you enjoyed my story regardless and that you were kind enough to read it and leave your sweet comments here. I am thrilled that my words allowed you to feel the heat, experience the terror and become the heroine. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments. ♥
DeleteIt's hard when you're faced with two unpleasant outcomes! I've not been in a fire (thankfully) but do fear its power.
ReplyDeletejannatwrites, I think in that kind of situation survival mode would kick in. I have never been in a fire either, but like you I fear it too. Thank you for stopping by and for your lovely comments! ♥
DeleteWow, how can you write such a powerful post in a few words ! Honestly I cannot do that !
ReplyDeleteAnanya, it takes practice! I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteA very cool 55 flash.
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GB, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat's an attention getter. Well done!
ReplyDeleteJoyce, I am so pleased you liked it. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteGoodness!! I hope she is ok..
ReplyDeleteThat was fabulously done in just 55 words!
pixie, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!♥
Delete:( but is she saved ?
ReplyDeleteAfshan, yes she is saved! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteWell written, felt like I was right there. Hope the protagonist survives.
ReplyDeleteSunday Visitor, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAndrea, thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥
ReplyDeleteScary but awesome! You have mastered both word power and word-counts!! :)
ReplyDeleteArchana, I am so pleased you liked it! I really enjoy writing the 55 fiction genre. Short, sweet, and a lot of fun. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThis is one of my nightmares, not fire, but getting trapped and a fall in a deep abyss is the only way out. You write so well!
ReplyDeletePratibha, I have had that falling into the abyss nightmare too! I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments♥
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