With swords drawn, Danny and Billy crept silently through the woods, ever diligent. While pausing to study the map by flashlight, they heard a distant twig snap.
Something or someone was coming. Their heartbeats quickened. The stakes were high. They must find the treasure before the enemy found it first! “Danny! Billy! Dinner!” yelled mom.
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It was such an anti climax!! I almost thought some one was going to get them, but it was mom!! Now I laugh but good fun.
ReplyDeleteLove the picture of the truck with all the tangle designs on it.
Inderpreet, I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteWow Kathy this was an anti climax. A good one.
ReplyDeleteUsha, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat was some treasure hunt! Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteBeloo, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThats such a good twist Kathy :)
ReplyDeleteAfshan, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deleteoh lol that was quite a twist. Trust mum to spoil it all!
ReplyDeleteSuzy, I am so pleased you liked my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteLoved Billy and Danny and their curious faces for the quest....Not sure how did they look like with mom's voice :-(.
ReplyDeleteJayanta, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. I imagine that they weren't pleased to have their game interrupted but in my experience kids are usually always happy to eat. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAbsolutely sweet :) Bother mum , did she have to go and burst this particular balloon :)
ReplyDeleteSunila, lol I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteBloody mum, always getting in the way of a good adventure! hehe
ReplyDeleteThis was fun. :)
Trisha, I know right?? Dinner always comes at the most inopportune moments! LOL Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteBeautiful post.
ReplyDeleteChoki, I am so pleased you enjoyed my post! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat's very sweet. That's a lovely twist at the end there.
ReplyDeletetinsenpup.net, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteDinner monsters are not half as frightening as we think when we see them!
ReplyDeleteBlessings and Bear hugs!
Rob-bear, I love dinner monsters because it means it is time to eat!! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHa ha ha - nice one Kathy:-) Can totally relate to their obsession ... and then : Back to reality:-)
ReplyDeleteEli, this time reality almost seemed like a slap in the face although I am sure both boys worked up quite an appetite in their adventures! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed my post! ♥
DeleteDinner always comes in the way! ;) I love the suspense you created, Kathy!
ReplyDeleteCorinne, I am so happy you enjoyed my little story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for you sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHehehe that is so Sweet... Lovely story.
ReplyDeleteRajlakshmi, I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAh.....the imagination of a child!!
ReplyDeleteMichelle, children have the best imaginations...especially before reality creeps in and really ruins it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deletelol it's the dinner monster, watch out for those vegetables
ReplyDeletePat, yes those veggies can be downright evil especially to a little boy! LOL Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteGive me a good quest to read about and I'm happy. :)
ReplyDeleteDavid, so pleased you stopped by and left happy!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deletereminded me of the times me n my brother played treasure hunt :-D good one kathy :-)
ReplyDeleteSwathi, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteBrought back memories of my cousin and I.
ReplyDeleteJoJo, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThe sound of that twig must have scared the dickens out of them. Love the twister and found this a delightful story.
ReplyDeleteMichelle, LOL I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteKids' imaginations are fun to experience - they make excitement out of the most ordinary things :)
ReplyDeletejannatwrites, which is what kids so much fun!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteCute! I love it. There's nothing so amazing or vivid as a child's imagination.
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DeleteAwwww, Mom! Cute story and nicely done in such a short word count.
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DeleteThat's how it is too! Moms voice!
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ReplyDeleteStepheny, thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteGood one!
ReplyDeleteAndrea, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteWhat a great story. It ends very cliffhanger and I would totally read more (even just based on this little snippet). Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteJessica, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAnd i got to be featured in your story! ;) Where's Billy? Loved the lead till the end...never saw that coming!
ReplyDeleteDanny, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHaHa! lovely 55ers Kathy! :D reminded me of Calvin and Hobbes' spaceman spiff adventures.. :D
ReplyDeleteVaisakh, LOL I didn't even think of Calvin and Hobbes. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteLOL! Leave it to Mom to ruin the fun.
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DeleteLol... Loved that one.
ReplyDeletetulika, I am so happy you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments. ♥
DeleteHAAAhahahaha!!! Good one!!!
ReplyDeleteKathleen, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story and it gave you a giggle! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHaha...cute!! I really got engrossed in this treasure hunt!
ReplyDeleteAditi, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteGood one :-) Glad to stumble onto your blog through the AtoZ initiative.. Glad to see another one choosing the flash fiction route .. By the way, I am writing 6-word stories everyday and visit my blog sometime if you can
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GSm WOW that is amazing...6 word stories! I will definitely drop in. Thank you for stopping by here to read my story and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deletehaha this was too cute! I missed my sister after reading this for some reason
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Nabanita, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHa ha! Mom is always the enemy, isn't she? Loved that touch at the end Kathy :)
ReplyDeleteShailaja, when it comes to interrupting playtime with dinner...yes! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAww!! So cute Kathy, too bad they had to abandon their quest midway for dinner.
ReplyDeleteReshma, the bad thing about that is that once you lose momentum on quest like that, you just never get it back. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAwww!! That was a cute one Kathy!!
ReplyDeleteI remember my mom used to call us at the exact time we had to fight the monsters and be the heroes of our story! What timing eh?! :D
pixie, moms somehow have it so planned! Course my son knows supper is being prepared, you would think that he would quit playing in anticipation of it...but he doesn't. He keeps right on playing and then is upset when he has to stop. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteVery cute! Those childhood monsters:))
ReplyDeleteTalya, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
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