A sweet voice coaxed him from the
abyss. The
closer he got, the more
excruciating the pain.
He remembered the
surprise ambush by the enemy, the fear, and the chaos. Struggling awake, he gazed into her
eyes. He trusted her instantly to ease
his pain and help him forget the horrific memories that haunted him.
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That opening is so powerful!
ReplyDeleteAndrea, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeletePowerful as Andrea says! And also brilliantly done...
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Nabanita, I am so thrilled you enjoyed my little story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deletean abyss it must have been....beautiful!
ReplyDeletethe little princess, it must have been! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! ♥
DeleteEmotions of a wounded soldier are brilliantly portrayed in your 55 fiction, Kathy. Awesome post.
ReplyDeletesulekkha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. I just tried to put myself in his place and imagine how I might feel in that situation...then wrote the story. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteQuite some imagery that is. war images always scare me. If jst the thoughts scare me I know how frightening actual exp can be
ReplyDeletegood one kathy !
Afshan, the thought of it scares me too. I can not imagine how brave the people are that choose to go off to war in the name of freedom. The actual thing must be terrifying. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteWar sucks. :( It's a small wonder why so many soldiers fall in love with the nurses who tend to them.
ReplyDeleteJoJo, I agree with you. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteA very catchy start to this post. Nicely done!
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Beloo, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteWonderful. Nice use of letter N.
ReplyDeleteJayanta, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteBeautiful. I love this as I've just been reading a book about war and it's heavy on my mind. Here's to emergency care workers, wherever they reside!
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Crystal, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Whenever I have been in situations that required emergency care workers I have been comforted and amazed how compassionate, kind, and efficient they were. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHaving someone to trust helps ease things a lot
ReplyDeletePat, I agree completely. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYou're killin' this A-Z challenge Kathy! Great pic to go with the story!!!
ReplyDeleteJoe, I don't know if I'm killing it or if it is killing me!!! LOL Oh hells bells. I woke up sicker than a dog today and it has been quite the struggle to get my butt in gear. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you so much for stopping by and for cheering me on! ♥
DeleteKaty you have woven a small but very powerful story in so few words. Yupee ! it is fantastic.
ReplyDeleteUsha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeletePowerful story, Kathy and so well written:)
ReplyDeletevishal, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for you sweet comments! ♥
Deletethat surely was powerful! u hav brilliantly woven this tale with few words kathy <3
ReplyDeleteSwathi, I am so happy you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteFew words, but yet so powerful.. Wonderful written dear Kathy:-)
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Lovely Kathy! Even after all he had gone through he trusted her to heal him!
ReplyDeleteAditi, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteNurses do seem a bit like angels, especially in a situation like that.
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Stephanie, yes they do. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteHope and trust, even in the midst of the storm . . . Beautiful, Kathy!
ReplyDeleteMartha, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThis post reminded me of this song:
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Trisha, I have never heard that song before! How cool. Thank you for stopping by to read, your comments, and for sharing the song here. ♥
DeleteSimple but so beautiful. The line "the closer he got, the more excrutiating the pain" at the start got me really intrigued!
ReplyDeletecelinejeanjean, I am so pleased you liked it. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYou really packed a lot of emotion in these few words. It made me curious to read more and I was not disappointed.
ReplyDeleteMichelle, I am thrilled that you liked it. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteMy Mom was a registered nurse for over 30 years so, I get this post and appreciate the sentiment very much. Thanks. :)
ReplyDeleteTom, I am so pleased you could relate to it and enjoyed it. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments!b ♥
DeleteBrilliant Kathy! The pain, the comfort, all rolled up into 55 words.
ReplyDeleteShailaja, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteMore than Doctors, I see Nurses being life savers. They really do out of their way to help patients.
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Maggie, I have known some nurses like that in the past! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteA War Imagery :) Lovely 55er, Kathy :) Nurses are angels :)
ReplyDeleteSreeja, they certainly can be. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
Deleteoh yes! I agree!! After my surgery.. it was the kind nurse who made my life easier! Nurses are life savers in a lot of ways!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful 55-word fiction Kathy! :)
pixie, they really are. They help you get through that pain and help you heal. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. ♥
DeleteThis was a bit haunting. I appreciate the work nurses do... I know I don't have it in me to do it!
ReplyDeletejannatwrites, before both my mom and dad died I took care of both of them. My mom was on dialysis and evidently I was so good with her and the other dialysis patients the people at the kidney center suggested I apply for a job there as a tech. I knew I could do what I was doing for my folks but wasn't sure how well i would do for others. I am kind of small at 5 foot and a weakling and was afraid I could never lift people like they expect you to do. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThe job of a nurse is tough, they have to heal more than just the physical wounds. Nice 55er Kathy!!
ReplyDeleteReshma, they sure do. There is a lot of emotional to deal with as well. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed my post! ♥
DeleteSuch a thought provoking post in so few words. Nicely done
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Carol, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI loved the way you described his emotions. Intense... And brilliant.
ReplyDeleteRajlakshmi, I am so pleased you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAnother great one, Kathy!
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DeleteGreat post, Kathy. The picture is powerful.
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