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“Sir, I was
involved in the accident. Do you have a
phone I could use to call for help?” He
stood alone under a sign that read “Angel Yard”.
“Jon, you
are past help. Why bother to ask for
help now?” he inquired peering deeply into my eyes.
Taken aback,
I tried a different tack. “I don’t
believe we have met. How do you know my
name?”
“I know
everybody.”
“Okay….” I looked back at the wreckage and the realization
hit me like a ton of bricks. “Am I dead?” I asked with a tinge of panic.
He smiled at
me. “Depends how you look at it. If you believe you belong here with your
whole heart, chances are you do.
Otherwise, if you don’t believe then you belong in the other place and
by all that is good and holy you will wish you were dead long before they are
through with you. Either way, you pay
your money and you takes your choice.”
“Money… now I am confused!” I looked back at the wreckage. I panicked again and things got real. Other motorists had stopped to gawk. The police had arrived, and an ambulance’s
siren could be heard in the distance.
Transfixed, I watched an officer leaning into what was left of my
Camaro. He pronounced me dead. Dead!
The word slammed around in my brain as I struggled to understand.
“The money you pay is the forgiveness
you request for your sins, the belief you have that you will be forgiven and
will be granted everlasting life regardless of all that has come before. You have to feel remorse so your soul can be sanitized
before you proceed. Otherwise, the money
you pay buys you a one way ticket to hell for eternity. Normally the decision is made before folks
get to this point, but often there are exceptions, people who have doubts. Question is, do you believe or do you doubt? It’s your choice. ”
My mind quickly replayed my life, good
and bad. We exchanged smiles, because instantly he
knew I did believe. He nodded and I proceeded
down Angel Road to my destiny.
Written for the Light and Shade Writing Challenge Monday Writing Prompt. |
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OK...a little too close to the bad dream I had this morning..... :(
ReplyDeleteJoJo, the story wasn't meant to mimic any nightmares. Thank you for reading and for your comments!
DeleteA literal use of the prompts. Good piece.
ReplyDeletejoe2poetry, I am pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping in to read and for your comments! ♥
DeleteWouldn't want to go to that other place
ReplyDeletePat, I am with you on that one. I don't imagine it would be too pleasant. Thank you for stopping in and for your comments! ♥
DeleteKathy this is right up my street. Twisty in all the right ways.
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Ally :)
Ally, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping in to read and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteLove it. Kathy, you address this subject so well. Love it! Such a great piece of flash fiction.
ReplyDeleteOh, and I nominated you today. http://crystalcollier.blogspot.com/2014/06/awards-for-meawards-for-you.html
Crystal, I am so happy you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by, your sweet comments, and for honoring me with an award! ♥
Deletewow! That was done wonderfully Kathy! The way you have twisted the prompt is brilliant!!
ReplyDeleteI guess it does make sense in away.. :D
I love your stories!! :)
pixie, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. While I haven't died recently to know what actually happens when you enter the hereafter, this story was fun to write and contemplate a possibility. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments and encouragement. It means an awful lot! ♥
DeleteGreat story Kathy. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeletetnkerr, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeletePowerful story! We all make that choice every day...believe or doubt.
ReplyDeleteStephanie, yes whether consciously or unconsciously! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your kind comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! ♥
DeleteThat's a very powerful story. Thank you for sharing. Lyssa M x
ReplyDeleteLyssa, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by to read and comment! ♥
DeleteYou certainly kept my attention! Good story
ReplyDeleteCarol, I am so happy you liked my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteAnother terrific story that I enjoyed Kathy!
ReplyDeleteMichelle, I am so happy you enjoyed my story! Thank you so much for stopping in to read and for your kind comments! ♥
DeleteI always enjoy your stories, Kathy and think you're an excellent writer. BTW, I used to have a 1978 Camaro Z28 which I loved and cringed at the thought of the car being totalled. Keep writing - you're a natural! ☺
ReplyDeleteDebbie, you have no idea how much your words mean to me especially when I am often riddled with self doubt about my skills! Thank you so much for stopping by and giving me the encouragement to continue to write. I am so happy you enjoyed my story. I had a similar love affair with a Ford Probe and a Dodge Shelby Charger. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThat's a nice story...just the kinds I like...a bit twisted with a valuable lesson at the end. We do make choices even when we are alive and well, guess we all need to :) Thanks!
ReplyDeleteKajal, I am so happy you liked my story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments of encouragement! ♥
DeleteI love how you describe the scene and create images in the minds of the readers. Wonderful write once again
ReplyDeleteRajlakshmi, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAmazing! I believe, Kathy :)
ReplyDeleteAnita, I believe too! Thank you for stopping by and for your comments! ♥
DeleteWhat a captivating story, Kathy! So engaging and thoughtful at the same time. Totally enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteBeloo, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteOh well done! I admire the way you describe the loss of control in the first part.
ReplyDeleteShailaja, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI held my breath for a little bit at the end... and then the exhale of relief when he did believe! Wonderful story - one that makes me stop and think.
ReplyDeletejannatwrites, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your supportive, kind comments! ♥
DeleteNow there's an encounter you don't have every day. Excellently told
ReplyDeleteThomas, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteI was glued to the words right from the moment it started ... brilliant :-)
ReplyDeleteAmrit, I am thrilled you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteAnd as they say all good things must end, such is life... lucky who get the angel road though..
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Richa, I agree. That is a bonus! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYour description of the scene before and after is very visual Kathy. every moment of our life is a step in belief, some universal, some personal, while some beliefs hold out true, many get shattered.
ReplyDeleteReshma, so very true and every step another chance to learn and understand! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteYou had me completely absorbed, Kathy! I love the layers of meaning here!
ReplyDeleteCorinne, I am so pleased you liked my story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteThe stress of the accident (I drive a Camaro!) and the resistance to the notion of being dead made me tense. In other words, this is an effectively executed piece. Ouch. The ending, of course, made it all worthwhile.
ReplyDeleteJoe, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥
DeleteGreat story and message, Kathy. You are so good at these short fiction pieces. Believe me, I know all about the writer's self doubt bit and I've even got the T-shirt as the cliche goes. Keep writing. Obviously others are enjoying it by all these positive comments you are receiving. You go, Girl!
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Cathy, Thank you for the encouragement!! I keep plugging, although not quite as wildly as I once did. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments. ♥
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