Monday, June 9, 2014

Guilty


      Sweat beaded up on my brow. My heart raced. She couldn’t have seen.    She was only five years old.  I had nothing to worry about! Her testimony would convict me. I did kill him.  He deserved it. Surely they wouldn’t believe her!  



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  1. And as we've learned from the Law & Order franchise children are being believed as credible witnesses!!! ;)

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    1. JoJo, yep...it just flowed out of my head so I went with it. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. Pat, he worries that he will be but is hoping he won't be. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  3. Mine are a little older now, but at five, they'd have fingered me a in a heart beat. Very creative.

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    1. Lance, mine too, especially my son who wins the integrity award at school every single year. :P HA HA Thank you for stopping by to read my little story and for your comments! I am so pleased you enjoyed it. ♥

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  4. ooh people who think children are stupid are the stupid ones. ;)

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    1. otherthanlovie, I agree. There are days when I am sure my kids are way smarter than me. It is scary. HA HA HA! Both are especially better at math. Lord last night my 8 year old was carrying on at the supper table about fractions, algebraic equations, and doing them in his head while his sister chimed in. It drove me bat shit crazy because I don't even LIKE math. Enough to give a person indigestion. HA HA HA! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  5. Oh, very nice job of evoking the fear!

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    1. Jennifer, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. Joseph, I agree. Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  7. Never underestimate the power of a tiny human. :) Nice take on the prompt.

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    1. psychochef, I agree! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your kind words! ♥

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  8. I just watched a 20/20 about a woman who was convicted of killing her daughter based on her 7-year-old son's testimony.

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    1. Stephanie, that is sad and proof that things like this happen. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  9. That's a creative little story full of big suspense. Nicely told, Kathy!

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    1. Beloo, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  10. The dilemma on the verdict well brought out. A tight and short story, Kathy.

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    1. Jayanta, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  11. where is the Grace when you need her?
    It always amazes me , the things that my now 6 yr olds, are capable of observing and giving back to me.

    I think it's time to be scared.

    Nice write!!!

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    1. Kir, HA HA HA I think so! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments and the giggles! ♥

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  12. That's a good angle to come from, enjoyed it.

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    1. theuncheshirewife, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. Stacie, it sure would be. One can only hope he is wrong and she didn't really see! Thank you for stopping by and for your comments! ♥

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  14. I like the direction you took. You nailed this one!

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    1. thewizardsword.com, I am so pleased you liked it! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  15. Could or could not convict me? Love the Freudian slip.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/

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    1. Joyce, I am so happy you liked my little story. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments. ♥

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  16. Interesting take on the prompt. Nice job.

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    1. theinnerzone, I am pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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    1. Maria, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  18. Hmmm. Grace at 5? You certainly went dark, Kathy!

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    1. Kymm, I am pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  19. interesting, dark twist on the prompt!
    i've heard that 5 year olds are not reputable sources though because you can plant images and fictitious in their memories and they can begin to believe that they are real when they are not. (i don't know about the reference/source/research that says that, but i definitely have heard it). interesting eh?

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    1. searchingforsubstance, it is interesting! The thing is the guy on the hot seat still is worried about it. That is where the key lies! Maybe he doesn't know that 5 year olds are reputable sources so he is worried...scared even. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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    1. Laurel, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  21. Crime remains a crime whether proven or not in my opinion. After all the one committing it know the truth and has to live with it always.

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    1. Reshma, very true and great point! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  22. Things are always messy when children get involved.

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    1. writingreallifetofiction, very true! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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    1. Rajlakshmi, I am so happy you liked it! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  24. sadly, in India, the words of a kid are hardly given prominence even if they are the key witness...

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    1. Roshan, in this guy's case that would be good news! HA HA Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  25. Ho I can almost the butterflies flying in the tummy

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    1. Mina, that thrills me that my words evoked butterflies! YAY! Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments! ♥

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  26. They will.. but she's a cunning little girl, it will cost you a lot of ice-cream :-)

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    1. Bjorn, it surely will! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  27. So busted! The 5 year olds are pretty honest. :)

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    1. Jen, that is the thing about kids that age...they can be brutally honest!! HA HA Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  28. Oh, I wouldn't be so sure... I bet the girl will be quite convincing on the stand and get tons of sympathy. Yeah, she's done!

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    1. jannatwrites, yep...no wonder he is worried! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  29. I can feel the adrenaline rushing down the spine. Kathy! A thriller worth every word woven.

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    1. vishalbheeroo, I am so happy you liked my little story! Thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments. Really managed to make my day vishal! ♥

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  30. Great train of thought here! So many things rushing through her head. Nice job, and thanks for linking up!

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    1. Christine, I am so pleased you enjoyed my post!! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments!♥

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  31. Kathy, you created wonderful little story here. So much can be said in 42 words- your story proves that.

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    1. architar, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!! ♥

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  32. The font really worked well here with the tone and flow of the story. (I have a graphic design background, I can't not notice!)

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    1. textwall, I am so pleased you liked it. I have a graphic design background too. :D Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  33. Lots here in this short piece! :)

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    1. Cherie, I so pleased you enjoyed my little story! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  34. Having killed already I'm very worried for the witness! I hope we tells someone soon.

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    1. sarahannhall, that is a scary proposition! Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  35. Yikes! Run away, little girl, run away!

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    1. innatejames, I agree!! HA HA Thank you so much for stopping by and for your sweet comments! So pleased you enjoyed my little story. ♥

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  36. That's a lot of story in 42 words. Great job, Kathy!

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    1. Meg, I am pleased you enjoyed it! These garglebusters are a challenge! Thank you for stopping by and for your sweet comments! ♥

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