Thursday, October 11, 2012

Saying Goodbye

For Day 10 of BlogFest 2012 we were given a picture prompt by today's host Daphne Palmer Romero of  My Distant Husband.  My interpretation for this prompt is a fictional story.  I hope you enjoy it.


     Could it only have been a week since he and Melissa had sat in this very spot holding hands and watching the tides roll in and out?  He had told her he loved her and that he wanted to spend the rest of his life with her.  It mattered little that they were barely teenagers.  Their love was timeless.  Her eyes had brightened as she looked into his.  She smiled the sweetest smile, blushed, giggled, and promised she would love him forever.  They had kissed to seal their promise to each other.  It had been his first kiss and it had been magical.  They had sat there a long time discussing their hopes and dreams for the future as they watched the sun set into the horizon.  It had been so perfect.  His life had held so much promise…then.  





        Tears clouded his vision as he gazed out to sea remembering the rainy Tuesday night that had followed.  It was not supposed to end like this!!  They had their whole lives ahead of them.  They had been the best of friends ever since he could remember.  Melissa had always been there, ever since that first day of kindergarten.  They had been instant friends and inseparable ever since.  Now because of slippery roads and a drunk driver his dreams with Melissa were gone.  Her life had been snuffed out.  When she left this earth, she took his heart with her.  Instead of the joy he once felt when he gazed out to sea, he only felt heart wrenching pain.  He railed at the fates that had taken her from him.  Sure they were young, but in his heart of hearts he could never imagine anyone taking her place.  She would always hold a special place in his heart.  She had been his dearest friend.   It had only been recently that he realized how beautiful a girl she truly was and that his feelings had run far deeper than mere friendship.  He never had wanted to lose her.  How would he go on without her now?



         He stood on the beach watching the tides, feeling the breezes against his face, as he waited.  It seemed necessary to wait for the sun to set.  She had loved the sunset.  She would have wanted him to stay.  He was alone on the beach, still he felt her presence.   As the sky darkened and the sun crept lower into the horizon he thought of her smile.  He thought about the way her sun kissed hair used to blow into her eyes, and without thinking she would push it away.  Finally the sun was gone, night had fallen, and with one last glance to the sea he whispered goodbye and walked slowly away knowing he would never forget his first love.  


36 comments:

  1. Beautiful! Simply touching ... --and heart wrenching!

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    1. Journey of Life, I am so happy you enjoyed it!! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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  2. And he probably never will. But he told her he loved her .. he had that. :)
    Wonderful work Kathy, thanks for linking up! :)

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    1. Larissa, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for including me in the link up and for stopping by to read and for your sweet comments! ♥

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  3. How heartbreaking! So wonderfully written, I really enjoyed reading it! :)

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    1. Loki-Lou, I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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    1. JoJo, I am honored that my story moved you to tears. I am weird that way. :D Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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  5. Wow! Visiting from Tidbit Thursday thanks for sharing such a great short story.

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    1. Angie, thank you for stopping in and reading. I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story!! Thank you for your sweet comments. ♥

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  6. Beautiful story. Actually brought tears to my eyes (my kids always say I am a sook when it comes to stories like this). Well done!
    Stuart

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    1. stufish7, I am thrilled that my little story moved you so! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments. There is nothing wrong with being a sook. ♥

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  7. Sniff, sniff.. next time include a warning 'tissues required'.

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    1. Brenda, sorry...I didn't realize the story would move everyone so profoundly. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! To me your sniffles are the highest compliment!♥

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  8. Beautifully written....
    Visiting from Papa is a Preacher
    Carolina
    sewcarolinaknits

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    1. Carolina, thank you for stopping in to read and for your kind comments. I am thrilled you enjoyed it! ♥

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  9. What a thoughtful, touching story. So much said in just a few paragraphs. Really beautiful.
    Kate
    http://www.traveling-forever.com

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    1. Kate, I am thrilled you enjoyed my little story. Thank you so much for stopping by to read it and take the time to tell me so! ♥

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  10. I love to see the way people intrepret such prompts. Your story is creative and touching.

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    1. Maggie, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments!!

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  11. very poignant and an excellent take on the prompt.

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    1. My Heart, I am so pleased you enjoyed my little story! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments!

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  12. unfortunately--this is all too real in so many ways. Great post Kathy :)

    My post for this prompt is over on The Short Story Gal. Check it ou t if you have time: http://theshortstorygal.blogspot.com/2012/10/vanished.html

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    1. Jenn, thank you for stopping by to read and for your comments! I am pleased you enjoyed my story.

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  13. Poignant, Kathy. The story is so real which makes it doubly sad.

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    1. Corinne, thank you for stopping in to read and for your kind comments. I am so pleased you enjoyed my story! ♥

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    1. Tara, thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments. I am so happy you enjoyed it! ♥

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  15. Kathy: I enjoyed this so much. I am all weepy. I was able to recall losing my first hubby and the emotions, and could transport myself to that beach. I love that you ended it with a positive memory for the young man. I look forward to reading more of your stories!!

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    1. Winnie, I am so happy you enjoyed it!! Thank you for stopping by to read and for your wonderful comments. I will try to come up with some more stories in the future. :D ♥

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  16. I have run across a couple of responses to that prompt. Yours has a great balance between sad and beauty. Thank you for sharing it.

    Visiting from the Papa is a Preacher Link Party.

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    1. Rennata, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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  17. i hope he will always hold on to her, in his heart, and also be able to find and give love again, freely... happily.

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    1. Danneromero, I think that as deep of a love as he had for her that she will always have a special place in his heart. He is young, and yes, I think he will love again. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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  18. You know I love these kinds of stories! Great job, Miss Kathy. I love how it is such a love story, yet the loneliest of all love stories because only one is left to love. Very well done.

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    1. Jo, I am so pleased you liked it!! Too often things work out this way. Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments! ♥

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